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Writing – Revising & Improving

Writing · Level 4 · Worksheet 5 of 5 · CCSS: W.4.5, L.4.1, L.4.2

Level 4 ⭐⭐⭐⭐

1 Replace Boring Words

⬆️ Replace overused words with stronger, more specific words.

2 Show, Don't Tell

🎭 Instead of TELLING a feeling, SHOW it with actions and details!

Telling: She was scared.

Showing: Her hands trembled and her heart pounded as she peeked around the corner.

Telling: He was happy.

Show it:

Telling: The food was delicious.

Show it:

Telling: It was cold outside.

Show it:

3 Revise This Paragraph

📝 This paragraph is okay, but it could be MUCH better. Rewrite it using stronger words, more details, and "show don't tell."

Original: I went to the park. It was nice. I played on the swings. Then I had some food. It was good. Then I went home. It was a good day.

My improved version:

4 Revision Strategy: ARMS

💪 Use the ARMS strategy when revising ANY writing!

A = Add details, descriptions, or missing information

R = Remove words or sentences that don't belong

M = Move sentences or ideas to a better order

S = Substitute boring words with stronger ones

Pick a piece of writing you've done before (from another worksheet or class). Use ARMS to improve it!

5 SBA Writing Rubric Self-Check

The state test scores your writing in three areas. Check your work from above and rate yourself honestly.

Purpose & Organization (Score 1-4):

☐ I clearly stated my opinion/topic ☐ My ideas are in a logical order ☐ I used transitions between ideas ☐ I have a strong conclusion

My score: / 4

Evidence & Elaboration (Score 1-4):

☐ I gave reasons or evidence ☐ I explained my evidence ☐ I used specific details ☐ I used my own words

My score: / 4

Conventions (Score 0-2):

☐ My spelling is correct ☐ My grammar and punctuation are correct

My score: / 2

What I will fix before turning in my writing: